Short Story Contest 1 - "Blood"
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Re: Short Story Contest 1 - "Blood"
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The writing is good but a wider range of vocabulary could be used. The sentences and paragraphs are structured clearly but the text feels....what's the word? A bit plain. Flat, almost. The use of repetition is effective. Emotive language could be used to make the reader feel angry,regretful,joyful,etc.
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Your grandmama is right. "Sometimes, good people do bad things."
I think, Tristan should not blame himself for his Big pa and Grandmama's death.
His parents made him think that he's evil. He was brought up unloved, unwanted and unattended that is why he tried to do bad things to get attention.
The story is well-written. I wish I could submit short story entries too but I don't know how to and what to write.
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