Short Story Contest 1 - "Blood"

The deadline for the second contest has already passed and the stories are available for reading. It had a Spring theme, and the winner got a $25 gift certificate. Stay tuned for information regarding another contest!
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Re: Short Story Contest 1 - "Blood"

Post by nidhish » 07 Oct 2014, 01:21

I just loved your story its creepy & sad at the same time .

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Post by Athena23 » 21 Oct 2014, 13:24

It was interesting. I can wait to read more of your work. Keep it up!

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Post by Varel Silvita » 23 Oct 2014, 18:15

Ok, if you are sensitive, take constructive criticism badly or just generally have a temper the size of France, then I suggest you ignore what i am about to write below.
The writing is good but a wider range of vocabulary could be used. The sentences and paragraphs are structured clearly but the text feels....what's the word? A bit plain. Flat, almost. The use of repetition is effective. Emotive language could be used to make the reader feel angry,regretful,joyful,etc.

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Post by TammyO » 26 Oct 2014, 11:49

Awesome story! I really enjoyed it. You are a very talented writer.
"The difference between fiction and reality? Fiction has to make sense." ~Tom Clancy

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Post by kennguyen » 08 Dec 2014, 03:32

Your article is great and I liked it immensely. trying to promote offline

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Post by CYMH090909 » 11 Dec 2014, 12:31

It was an alright story. I didn't like the repetitive use of I'm evil though. The story reminded me more of a poem instead of a short story.
*The truth doesn't always hurt*

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Post by Profeta » 29 Dec 2014, 18:38

I love it!. He needs to find the reason because nobody love him and that was because he is evil. So to his life make sense, he needs to become in to a mad man.

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Post by pallavi garg » 15 Feb 2016, 11:28

Scary...sent a shiver down my spine...but truthful...I think psychopath can't control urges..very well constructed and well described scenes...

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Post by Diana Welch » 03 Oct 2017, 20:15

Your story is scary and great.

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Post by john harvey » 08 Oct 2017, 03:33

good post keet it up :)

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Post by Shayaree Chanda » 28 Oct 2017, 01:27

A good story to read. Awesome way if using repeating "I'm evil." Would love to read such stories in the long run.

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Post by Dolor » 09 Nov 2017, 16:21

You had scared me.

Your grandmama is right. "Sometimes, good people do bad things."

I think, Tristan should not blame himself for his Big pa and Grandmama's death.

His parents made him think that he's evil. He was brought up unloved, unwanted and unattended that is why he tried to do bad things to get attention.

The story is well-written. I wish I could submit short story entries too but I don't know how to and what to write.

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