A Short Poem

[thirddd]

Here's a short poem I recently wrote, let me know what you guys think!

Standing tall so far from grace,
Foul trees crowd this hollow place,
Their arms they rise from darkest space,
Both black and blue and filled with hate,
Yet still their reach is upward bound,
When fate would have them seek the ground,
For life is found both up and down,
Their leaves look up,
While roots, they drown.

[Ant]

Well thought out, I would have liked a second verse.

[Twilight_2_Midnight]

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more?

[jasperellis]

It wasn't a really great poem.

[sabilamalik]

thank you brother, its really nice and heart touching, great sharing, appreciated

[softprerna]

Its really nice and heart touching poem...

[kaderontor]

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more?

-- 02 Oct 2012, 14:00 --

I respect the darkness of it all, as it has something in common with the message I usually put across in lyrics for my songs/poems. Loving your thoughtful description, maybe write some more?

[rintubiswas]

kitne dino se ye asman bhi soya nahi hai isko sula de..