1st draft spoken word poem feedback?:)

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1st draft spoken word poem feedback?:)

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Star catching
I could never catch a ball right
So instead I started catching stars
and I think its been going pretty well
because now I have a room full of twinkling wonders that I stuck up on my bedroom ceiling
to illuminate my dreams
Which is very important to me because I also happen to be a professional dreamer
So I need all the light I can get
To help me plan the blueprints for my life
To help me prepare for everything

In my mind I’ve lived out so many scenarios of the possibilities of tomorrow
That I almost feel like I’ve already lived the world
When I haven’t even stepped out of own my skin yet

And I crave change like coffee
To wake me up from reality
And nostalgia to convince myself that I value something enough to miss it
Some people don’t like the idea of getting older
Some people don’t like the idea of moving on
Some people don’t like the idea of change
But something about nothing excites me
Something about not knowing makes me feel completely in control
Because too many times knowing makes you realize,
How far you actually are from where you want to be
Makes you realize that it was just a dream
In schools they teach you that when water freezes it turns into ice
But they never tell you that once magic freezes it turns into concrete- solid. Routine.
And change is the only heat that’s gonna melt your concrete back into magic and make it complete
Blindness is bliss they say
Saying I’m blind to my future seems a little inaccurate
But mostly true
Because right now my future is written on the palms of my hands
With red ink
But lately its been too cold to walk around without gloves
Thick woolen gloves that mask any trace of what is to come
But that’s the way I like it
Because this way what happens next is up to the
Dreams I dream
And the stars I catch
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I like this...the "But something about nothing excites me" was may favorite snippet. I feel this each time my alarm sounds in the morning.
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"In schools they teach you that when water freezes it turns into ice
But they never tell you that once magic freezes it turns into concrete- solid. Routine.
And change is the only heat that’s gonna melt your concrete back into magic and make it complete"
I absolutely loved these lines. It is a bit confusing for me, although perhaps that is just because I'm up very early. Good job :)
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