Delightfully blown away

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Delightfully blown away

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My courage in the middle of nowhere
she came into my life like a grenade
I reeled back to familiar territory
and stepped on a land-mine

Blown away! We both were and then we weren't...just
a myriad of incandescent stardust undulating like waves
in a sea of oblivion...a sea that conquered the byzantine
walls I erected to safeguard...? (NOTHING, nada, zip, zero)

HA!...Hahahahaha! a maniac laughter in the face of concrete reality
I built a fortress to hedge in barren land. Poor pathetic soul was I until
she. She impregnated my defenses with that fatal explosion like firework
lighting up my starless night with her radiant glow brighter than any full moon

Truly in the beginning darkness was upon the face of the deep
my world was without form and void of...I could never tell what
but the object of my desire was not what but who and I did not
know until there was a big bang and light rushed in victoriously

the sea of oblivion surrendered a myriad of stardust to the sure hands
hydrogen bonds and van der waals forces coalesced microscopic light
varying sizes of atoms embraced each others disclosing intimate truths
in a language untainted by philology, politics, nor his story or her story

Our stories intertwined as twain become singular
and the script is rewritten as stories loses plurality:

My courage in the middle of nowhere
she came into my life like a grenade
I reeled back to familiar territory
and stepped on our lands
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Post by DATo »

This is good stuff. I enjoyed reading it very much. You captured the essence of the proverbial "Love At First Sight" in those first three stanzas. One very small change might help .... She came into my life like an exploding grenade. Just a thought.

Once again, excellent poem. I'd love to read more of your work.



PS: Does she have a sister?
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Thanks for the suggestion DATo. I will definitely consider it for future postings of this poems. I hope to continue my poetry on this site so look out for more. As for the sister, I have yet to find out. I am constantly writing about romantic love though I am not in a relationship at the moment. I guess by the time she comes around I will have my lines all rehearsed and pray not to fumble them. Lol.
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I like it.
I really liked some of your word choices.
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