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Late night habits

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Late night habits

Post Number:#1 by Jaime Lync
» 18 Apr 2017, 18:35

Late night habits
late nights have me
Awake, I'm awake
In the middle of the night
Eating whatever I can get my hands on
Ice- cream, chocolate, hot dogs, hot sauce
Wiping tears from my cheeks
Are they from joy or sorrow?
My life is bleak
So that's a rhetorical question

I'm the fat, four eyes, bow legged geek
In short, I'm freak
Get picked on everyday of the week
Even family members make fun of me
Act like it doesn't bother me
But whenever everybody is asleep
I'm in the fridge
Eating whatever I can get my hands on
I'll never be more than a fatso

These late nights
These late night habits have me
Thinking I should get my hand on some poison
These late night habits have me breaking down myself
My haters' words hurt I'll admit
But I'm the one defeating myself
Myself telling me I can't walk away
So I stayed awake
Living out my nightmares

But God lay me down to sleep
And spoke to me in my dreams like he did to Joseph
Now I know this
I was made for his pleasure
You ain't gotta like me
In his eyes I'm a treasure
Now I rest in my refuge
Thank God for the good news
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Re: Late night habits

Post Number:#2 by Christina O Phillips
» 20 Apr 2017, 11:21

Good job with the rhythm and flow here. The rhymes work well, too.
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Re: Late night habits

Post Number:#3 by DATo
» 21 Apr 2017, 10:14

I agree with Christina. Very nicely done!
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