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How could i

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.

How could i

Post Number:#1 by Amcdanel86
» 30 Oct 2016, 00:32

I didn't know I could love again
how could I he hurt me so
I didn't know I could trust again
how could I he lied to me
I didn't know I could feel safe again
how could I he hurt me so
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Re: How could i

Post Number:#2 by Ljessup
» 03 Nov 2016, 09:51

This poem causes many different thoughts for me. I have to applaud you because I keep re-reading it trying to figure out why one would feel this way, to this degree of repetitiveness, with little to go off of other than the fact that there is a negative vibe flowing from the words. I say that to show it is captivating in its own way because as human beings the natural curiosity is what keeps us reading on, but I feel incomplete and unable to connect with the work itself because what I could latch onto so as to understand the pain being portrayed is absent. All in all I still enjoy it immensely because of the conflicting emotions it causes me. That is the way I hope to feel at the end of a poem so job well done in my opinion.

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Post Number:#3 by versetab
» 02 Dec 2016, 17:15

A bit of typo, but i certainly liked it. Short and nice...
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Post Number:#4 by Insightsintobooks
» 09 Jan 2017, 00:08

I liked this. Even though it's short it brings up questions of trust and love.
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