My name is Christian, I'm from Spain, and I'm currently 21 years old.
Bearing that in mind, notice that english is not my main language, so please be patient with me if i make grammar mistakes.
Now, about me, i would like to point out that all my life i loved making up stories in my mind, and my goal (or dream) was always to get those stories on the cinema, but as time passes i see less odds of that happening, so instead i decided to try and write something down.
That is where this topic comes in, i would like to post something i write just today about a story that i have been thinking for years, obviously its not even close to being complete (not this piece i wrote today only, but the whole thing itself).
Also, please note that im not a regular reader, in my entire life i probably only read like 4 books, from whose 2 were in Spanish and 2 were in English.
With this i mean that i don't know how to write books and therefore there will be many many problems with it, so i want you all to kindly give me feedback both on the story and the writing side of the thing, to improve both things.
Having that said, thank you for reading and here i leave what i written today, notice that this is just a small part and does not have any kind of end, its just the beggining of the story.
Also, sorry if this post doesnt belong here, wasnt sure about where to put it.
Here it goes:
Above, a big moon in a night sky. Below, a little girl in a dark forest.
The moon, on its first quarter but growing. The girl, unconscious but awaking.
She blinks, sees the moon and the stars, incorpores herself on the grass that she's gently crushing with her body, and looks arround.
The trees surround her in the distance, as she lays still in a plain.
She looks back up to the sky, with the moonlight shining on her, showing off her features.
Pale skin, blue eyes and long blonde hair covering her childish face, that express nothing but
innocence. She's wearing a long white dress with her bare feet exposed alongside her whole arms, which apparently doesn't cover her enough from the cold wind as she starts to shiver, reaching with her hands to each one of her arms to cover herself as much as she can.
After inspecting the area for a bit, the cold starts to win the battle as she finally gets up
from the grass in a slow pace.
Her face as she spins arround from side to side is one of fear, as she doesnt decide what path
to take, if any. After a couple more glances at the forest all arround her, she hears distant noise
from one direction, and so makes that her path to follow, leading the way with the right foot first.
As she reaches the trees and finally leaves behind the grass from the plain, she
gets a look of a city in the distance, at the other side of the wood. Being night time, the city
really catches attention as its light makes even the brightest stars fade into oblivion with its
own corrupted light.
Apparently lost, she gets one last look arround between the trees from the forest as if she was looking for something, but the wind passing through the leaves and branches make strange noises that scare the poor little girl, and so she forgets about anything she could have been looking for and makes a rush to the city, starting to run and trying to not look back.
In that run she finally gets to the dark corners of the city which are surrounded by a highway.
She however does not notice the road and keeps running, only to get to a stop in the middle of it,
as a pair of lights come quickly to her from the horizon.
Confused and scared, she screams and covers her head in fright, and without knowing what was going on, the lights bordered her in the last second making a scratchy sound that scares the girl even further.
The thing suddenly stops a couple of meters away from her, and as she gets her sight back up again, she sees the now red lights that seem like evil, glowing eyes looking directly at her. She stares petrified for a bit until she hears a crack sound and starts to run after shouting a little scream of fear, heading deeper into the city. Behind her, a man peeks out of the car from the door that he just opened, and calls out for the girl to be more careful, but she does not listen.
Finally into the city, she lowers her rhythm and starts to walk slower, as she suspires from
tiredness, just realizing now how her feet are starting to ache from being bare, not to speak
about the cold street giving her even more tremblers. Still, having getting a bit hot with that exercise
has helped her to get in heat, and so before she gets colder again, she starts to run at a
slower pace than before, trying to not surpass her limit as she sighs with each step she gives,
making her breath visible in the cold wind that she is running against.
In her hurry and with the wind making her long hair wave in the air, she gets to the sidewalk just as a little air swirl gets her and tangles her with her own hair, blinding her sight for a brief moment. Without a stop, she tries to untangle herself from her hair, but just as she is finishing and gets a glance to the sidewalk, she notices a young man walking out from a dark alley, and inevitably stomps into him. The young man doesnt even react to the stomp, he just stands still and looks at the girl looking back at him with fear and confusion, on the edge of crying. His face doesnt help her either, as his expression is serious and unconcerned, he stares at her eyes without even blinking for a brief moment. Scared of the unkown young man, she dodges and gets in the dark alley from which he came. He just follows her with his eyes until the darkness swallows her, not even speaking or changing his expression, and then just keeps walking on the sidewalk, disappearing from the sight of the alley.
The girl runs and runs with no stop into the darkness until a wall steps in her way and hits her, making her fall down and forcing her to sit facing a wall. Everything arround her is dark, a streetlight flashes in and out above her, showing once again her face, now with her eyes red as silent tears stream down her cheeks. The streetlight that was coming and going decides to stop for a while, and surrounded by darkness, she sees a faint light in the distance.
She runs once again towards the light, hoping to not step into anything. She starts to cry as she gets closer and closer, gasping from the fear and exhaustion. She arrives, and as she does so, giant shadows are proyected in the building walls that form the alley. There are many, they giggle and move in strange ways, and the closer she gets, the bigger they get and the clearer the sounds become. She hears many men that seem to give voice to the shadows, so she gets shy and stops running, walking slowly instead, heading to the corner that hides the men.
She takes a peek arround the corner, and there it is the light of the source, a barrel that has been lighted with fire inside, and arround it, a bunch of seemingly homeless people, seven in total, taking advantage of the heat that the fire irradiates. They keep giggling in worn out tones, and hitting beer bottles between themselves as if celebrating something. The girl, even being unnoticed by them, its intimidated by their behavior and thinks twice before crossing the corner, but the cold she feels right now its too much for her, and so she gets arround the corner in a shy walk, looking at the floor, but then freezes there, next to the corner without doing or saying anything. After a little, one of the mans notices her, and advices the rest.
─Hey, kid! Watcha doing here? You lost, aren't ya? ─Said one of the old men, all wearing similar torn clothes that apparently had the same age as them, or even more─.
─Wanna join us kid? Come and heat ya'self, you tremblin' there! ─Said another one of them, while they kept giggling and drinking in turns, looking each other when not looking at the girl.
Meanwhile, the girl stood still looking at them with red eyes from crying, not knowing what to do, saying nothing. Still, a shiver crossed her spine, and after that and feeling the heat irradiating from the barrel in the distance, she finally gave in and started walking shyly towards the barrel.
─That's it kid! Come on guys, let her some space! ─Said one, and following his suggestion, the men that were gathered arround the barrel now left an open space for her to join them. She got closer and closer and as she did, like with the shadows, the men appeared to get taller and taller, forcing her to turn her neck up in order to keep track of their eyes. At last, she gets to the barrel and starts to heat her hands, waving them in front of the fire, closing again the circle arround the barrel.
─Attagirl, tell us, are you lost kid? ─Says one in front of her at the other side of the barrel, looking at her with a big grin on his face. She, focused on getting the cold out of her body, only answers with a shy, slow nod from her head.
─So? Are your parents here girl? Are they arround? Looking for you or somethin'? ─Asks one in a low tone that almosts sounds like a whisper. She then stares at the fire for a bit as if thinking, then cries a tear or two, and looking at the old man who asked, slowly shakes her head. All of them grin in creepy ways as she shakes her head, looking at each other as they do, drinking and giggling as if that was everything they knew to do.
─Then don't you worry "milady"... We'll take care of you... ─Says the one to her right as he gently places his left hand on her back caressing her. She then for the first time smiles still with tears on her face, and even giggles for a second. Then, the hand on her back proceeds to go lower and lower slowly─. We'll make sure you are very... hot, for the night... right, guys...? ─Says in a giggle as he proceeds to get his hand down to her waist, and still going down. But before he can get his hand further down, and just after the girl realices that something is wrong, someone kicks the man into his comrades, getting his hand out of her.
─Hey! W-What's up with that!? Who are you, his father?! W-We were just talking with the girl, we swear! ─Claims one of the lucky ones that are at the opposite side of the barrel and therefore are still standing, yet they are retreating a bit from the barrel alongside the mans on the left of the girl. The ones on her right are on the ground, three in total counting the one that landed his hand on her─. Allright allright, we don't want any trouble pal! We'll just leave, okay? Please, don't do anything stupid! ─Says the same one as they all start running off into the darkness of the alley, followed by the ones that got kicked to the ground. At last, only the girl and his savior remain, she turns arround slowly, seemingly scared as she catches with her eyes what appears to be a face, lit by the thin fire. Is the young man from before, the one she hitted while running into this alley. His face is still has the same neutral expression, not happines, not angriness, not sadness, nothing. He just looks at her again, staring with his serious, inexpresive face, as she stares back, scared.
Now she gets a better look at him, his hair is a black so dark that it gets blurred with the dark of the night, it's short but uneven, making it look longer on some parts. His eyes are clear blue, while his skin tone is not as pale as hers. His clothes like his hair seem to not fit him, having a black, worn out jacket over a white tank top, while below he has regular blue jeans, that dont seem to fit him just right, having many creases. Lastly, he wears white sneakers that dont even have the cords tied, giving him a careless look overall.
After a little bit of stare, he finally moves and she gets scared by the sudden move, and so she covers herself with her arms as if protecting herself. Much to her relief and surprise, after just a moment she hears him walk away at a slow pace, like nothing happened, not even caring about her.
He continues walking away from the light, while she just stands there looking at him go away, not understanding anything. At the end, she just gives up and sits there with her back to the barrel, flexing her legs and crossing her arms across them, sinking her head in her dress between her knees and arms, sobbing a bit.
Just before disappearing in the dark, the young man stops at her cries and turns arround just enough to see her, still with his serious face. He stares at her as she just stays there, doing nothing but sob and cry with her head covered on her dress, all alone. He stares and stares, not even blinking, and after a bit he sighs and starts walking towards her at the same careless pace than before. He stops just in front of her and flexes his kness and back just to get his head the closest possible to her level.
─Go home ─He says in a dry, cold tone, and after standing a bit as if waiting for an answer that never came, he got up again and started walking away again. Just when he was about to reach the darkness of the alley, she whispered.
─I can't... ─And kept sobbing against her dress. That got the attention of the young man that stopped inmediately and turned again.
─Are you lost? ─He asked, with his unchanging tone corresponding his unchanging face. He had to yet again wait a bit for her to answer, while she sobbed and cried a little bit.
─No... That's not it... ─She mutters getting a little bit more relaxed, finally conversating with someone.
─Then? ─He questions.
─I... I can't remember... ─She says in a shy, sad voice, finally getting her head up from her knees and arms to see the world again, slowly. He, however, sighs again and turns arround to leave the place, walking.
─N-No! W-Wait, please! I-I'm afraid... I-I don't want to be alone... P-Please dont leave me alone... I'm scared of the darkness... of everything here... I-I'm so scared... A-And... A-And I really don't remember...! ─She pleads while crying, but he is no longer seen in the alley, as the dark swallowed him whole. Still, his footsteps can be heard getting to a stop.
─What do you mean you don't remember? ─Says the cold, emotionless voice coming from the darkness in front of her. Even though she cant see his eyes, it feels as if the whole darkness was looking back at her. Even though she hears the same voice from the man before, it feels more fitting in the face of the darkness when it speaks.
─I-I mean that... I don't remember... I don't even remember my name or who i am... who my parents are... I don't remember where my home is... or if there is even a home for me... I don't remember anything... ─She whispers, getting her sobs to a stop bit by bit as she speaks. The darkness stays silent for a little while, staring at her.
─I can't help you. ─The darkness answers, and its footspets can be heard once again slowly fading away.
─P-Please! I can't stand being alone, i can't stand the darkness...! Please! I beg you, help me...! I don't know where i should go... What i'm supposed to do?! ─She screams in both anger and sadness, sobbing a little bit again. She feels his eyes again staring through the dark. After a bit of silence, it answered.
─What if the darkness was the one to make you company... would you want that? ─He said, in a tone even colder than before─. Or would you be too afraid? ─He asks, and she stares there for a while, thoughtful, putting her sobs to an end only to answer in a shy tone.
─Well.. I-I don't like the darkness... so... ─She starts, whispering─. If i had to stay in the darkness... I would bring my own light, so we both could make company to each other... ─She finishes, putting a gentle smile on her face as she cleans her tears off from her cheeks. If she was just a kid saying senseless things or if there was more to it, only she knew. Anyhow, that answer apparently got the attention of the dark, as it stood still for a while in silence.
─Very well ─It finally answered─. Then come. ─And as if inviting her, an arm spreading throught the dark with an open hand at the very end appeared in the middle of the alley, lit by the fire that was now fading from the cold wind.