Broken Bones by Deja Black

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Broken Bones by Deja Black

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After reading the intention and desires of the author after the book, I understand the basis in forming the characters of the story but felt she fell short of her goals. The seed of the story has a good hold in the love/vengeance/hero paranormal category, but the characters are unbelievable and the plot up in the air.
The story begins with Daniel who was the victim of abuse by his father and lover-a great attention grabbing start. However his character then morphs into the hero/whiner/coward/hero/victim/hreo/aggressor and the rapid cycling is hard to keep up with or believe. Then enters his adopted family (wolf shifters) and best friend. The wolves' manner of speaking doesn't ring true-far too upper class gentry and the molly coddling that takes place seems unrealistic. Then we get to meet Dr Aiden Kavanagh-a sandman whose days on earth on are numbered unless he can find his keeper and soulmate to bind him. Again-a bit of a fluffy character.
The pace of the story was slow until the final battle-then poof-if you blinked you missed one of pretty much the most important scenes. The "Land of Dreams"-bit immature. And then there were the sex scenes-I am definitely not a prude when it comes to a story needing these, but to have so many and in such graphic terms-there was nothing in the bio to prepare me for them-seemed to take up more than the important parts of the story. Using words like susurrus and fulgent and then following them with clichés- "drooling with anticipation" and "thinking about your melons"? Just no. Also if you are going to go to the trouble of using words like coimeádai to keep the authentic tone then use crêpe and not crape.
So two questions (spoiler alert)-why at the beginning of the book does Aiden say that Keith is in no way his blood brother or even a brother like Conner when at the end he mourns (or rejoices) over getting an adopted family which will be closer than the "biological" brother he knew (Keith)? And the tattoo he receives as the keeper's mark-DTK? His name is Daniel Michael Tolliver-does it stand for Daniel The Keeper?
An average debut for the author but the stories and characters need a lot more work and the editor needs to catch the verb tenses that don't always correspond.
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